Antigone Cadmus

You're a very good writer, but the piece is a bit boring. Is there going to be a plot? Maybe I just can't get into old people stories :) It's ...

I liked it! Several things though: My heart is empty and searching. My vanity is all but gone. My life is something to discover but for now it is simply ...

I'm no poet, but I think the uses of the word "baby" make it slightly corny, as well as the line "I'll climb a mountain or run a marathon". "Your ...

A bit cheesy. When Harry talks to Fre'ds body, he almost sounds like he doesn't care. Also, this isn't really a fanfic. It's basically paraphrasing what happens in the book. ...

Wow! That was really good. I love Death Note, and you really got deep into the symbolism. And props, you stayed in present tense the whole time (difficult to do, ...

Hey! I promise I'll do a full review later, but here is some critique right away. 1. Again with the dialogue! Absolutely no description. I don't mean you need to ...

This is an intimidating amount to critique... I started reading, but I got bored, sorry. But I am impressed. You did your research. You're pretty knowledgeable about Japanese culture. Props ...

It's written very well, but the beginning made me roll my eyes. Poor you, so unloved. *rolls eyes to demonstrate* it's kinda hard to understand most anything. Most of the ...

'Ello! Very good, though I do roll my eyes at the whole post 9/11 horror story, no matter how liberal i may be. :) The funny thing is, I was ...

Well, it's in IM slang, so I can't chastise your grammar, but I still have critique... 1. The IM theme has been done before in books like TTYL, but it ...

My only real critique is, you switch up your tenses. You begin the story in past tense- "She read", and later switch to present- "Anne hears". You need to pick ...

First of all, we have a rule here at the forum that you need to have 2 reviews before posting your work. :) Sorry, I'll do a full critique later ...

You're off to a good start here, but like adi said, start a new paragraph whenever a new line of dialogue opens up. Why is that?” I shifted my position ...

The best book I have ever read is A Clockwork Orange by Anthony Burgess. It is very original and takes a different point of view on violence then most books ...

Well, it's a bit short, but it's always good to use capitalization :) Also, we have a rule (more of an etiquette kind of thing) that you need to have ...